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  1. teSt TESt..

    I am GoINg To PoSt My FiRst DrafT..

    WaitNG 4 THAt yUA..

  2. My Best Friend

    First day when I stepped foot in front of a room that it became my new class, I saw to around of the room and some college students who looked busy with their activity. I thought that the class was my new class and they would be my classmates.
    I sat and talked with one of female students in left of me. Her name is Irma. She came from Bandung. We chatted how come we were accepted in Education University of Indonesia especially English Department. Apart of her, I introduced my self to Selvi. She sat next to Irma. She came from Tasikmalaya. She lived in Bandung with her cousin. And then, I walked slowly around the class and acquainted with other students. They came from different city. A few minutes later, a female student entered the class late and she sat in a chair back of me. When I saw toward her, I already knew her. Actually, she was Tia, my friend in English course when we were in senior high school. So, we chatted and told story each other.
    My friendship with Tia, Selvi and Irma more close. It was begin when we were in same group for speaking subject. Apart of that, we had same hobby, it was dress up. Before enter to the class for joining the meeting, we used time for dressing up in bathroom. It was very pleasure become their close friend. They could manage the time for studying and taking a walk. They gave a lot of good advices for me who has younger age than them. If I got some problems, I told to them.
    My friends were increase when I met other college students from class C1 in Windy’s rent house. Actually, I already know some of them like, Ami and Kean. They were my friends in senior high school. However, Windy introduced me to her other friends. Minda, Dhanni, Bayu, Ajeng, Desti, Fajar, Dhea were my new friends. They were very nice to me. One thing that I like from their characteristic was they acted playful and told some jokes. We humiliated each other but no one between us felt offended.
    One day, Kean invited me to join and come to Saung Sadu in Soreang. He asked me for fishing together with other students from his class. We fished, have a lunch and taken some pictures there. I felt very comfort around them. They were more attractive than my close friends in class B1. That made me happier stayed with them than with my friends in B1 because I was a talkative person too.
    Apart of that if they were assembling in Windy’s rent house, one of them sent message to me and invited me. And then if they were organizing some events, they asked me to join.
    Confusion happened when Kean asked me to move on to his class. Apart of Kean, the other students from class C1 invited me to move. So, their class would more crowd. Actually, I wanted to move on because I already became a sister between them. I was very glad stay around them. They were very cohesive.
    I told my planning to one of my close friends, Irma. She was little surprise but she heard my story until finish. After she heard my story, she didn’t agree with my planning because if I moved to class C1, class B1 would more quite. Because of motivate from my friends in class C1, I intended to move class. Irma gave me advice that to move on other class was very difficult and busy.
    Actually, I didn’t bring my self to leave class B1 and my best friends; Irma, Tia and Selvi. If I could I wanted they move on with me too but it was not impossible. Class C1 only could add one or two new students.
    To make me easier, Kean, Ajeng, and Ami would try for helping me to move class. I could move on in second semester. I knew to arrange this one is very busy but the students of C1 would help me. If I couldn’t move on to class C1, I would stay in B1 but my friends in C1 would still become my best friends.

  3. @Frierdatianty
    Comments:
    I hope this is only the beginning of your story because I can only see the orientation part. If you intended that this is the whole story, you should put more complication and resolution in the end.
    Overall, your story already has introduced the setting, characters, and initial plot to the reader clearly, which is a good thing. Now, you can develop the story and make sure your plot run smoothly.

    Some grammatical corrections:
    I saw (to) around of the room and some college students who looked busy with their (activity).
    I sat and talked with one of female students (in) left of me.
    We chatted (how come we were accepted in Education University of Indonesia especially English Department).
    They came from different (city).
    she sat in a chair (back of) me.
    My friendship with Tia, Selvi and Irma [?] more close.
    It (was begin) when we were in same group for speaking subject.
    (If I got some problems, I told to them).
    My friends (were increase)…
    (One thing that I like from their characteristic was they acted playful and told some jokes).
    I felt very (comfort) around them.
    I (was very glad stay )around them.
    class B1 would (more quite).
    Because of (motivate )from my friends in class C1, I intended to move class.
    If I could [?] I wanted they move on with me too but it was not impossible.

    ** 20.11.2008. 23:33

    Hamdan

  4. pak, mksudnya grammar yg dikurungin itu apa?
    i dont understand . hhe

  5. (…) maksudnya kata-kata tersebut tidak tepat bentuknya atau salah pemilihan kata
    [] berarti ada kata yang kurang

  6. Well, it such a great thing to be in University Indonesia of Education student. I was very thankful of that, what a pride.

    The first time I saw it…it’s like a “huge-broad” things built on my sight.I never been in a place such a big and wide as UPI. Wherever I see, and whenever I look around, there was a fancy building everywhere with a lot of busy students walking around you. I feel like in a right nuance to study here.

    I never knew that UPI had a lot of achievements in every UKM, I never knew that UPI’s reputations was greater than I ever thought.

    From now one I’ve changed my philosophy about UPI. I always thinking that this university is the cheapest and the most complete place in West Java I ever been, and I’m sure about that.

    Well, when I started to get my academic life in UPI, I started to come home to my hometown once a week as normally. But someday I didn’t get work normally. Every week when I went home, I always shared about all of my activities on Bandung, and I always begging for some advices from my parents to get a better life to overcome the problems that I faced. Most of the stories of my activities were just ordinary stories, so honestly, there is nothing special to tell to my parents. You know, just like another boys who rent some rooms. Maybe, some of them got their happy moment by hanging around and playing around with their roommates, somewhere, someplace. That’s not happened to me, I was just studying, browsing, doing my task, praying, and coming back to my rent house, just an ordinary stuff of rent house’s boy.

    But, on this previous fasting month we had ‘Buka Bersama’ on our Department. We get along on that event, we accomplished it out. But, I didn’t really know why sometimes I always feeling lonely, even when your friends around you, It was an absurd feelings that I feel till now. Everyday I was just doing the same thing, from 1 to 2, then it’s going to 3, and so on. It was quite contrast with my soul. I was quite sure that this problems occur on most of new students. I just couldn’t settled it up yet.

    There always a love story besides your story life. I had to face some new big-mouth persons, annoying persons, short-thinking persons, and so on. That was a new challenges for me, new burden to have with its various obstacles. Besides that, girl would never come out of my head. To be honest, I couldn’t life without girls in my mind and soul, at least your own mother on it. It’ new environment, but I feel the same old love story, cause the girl was still the same since I was in Senior High. Well, in this all kind of new things, I always not to lose my contact with her, at least I talk to her for about twice a week, or more, that if I was lucky. She broke up with her old boyfriend, that was the most unexpected news that I ever heard since my new life began till now. But, even so, I realized that I couldn’t chase her for any longer. If you ask me why??..I’ll answer “you I don’t know!”, cause it was just my intuition. I was just lying on my destiny.

    I’m sure that it was still a long process to walk ahead. I often upset when I met one of my friends who was selfish, it was true, it was based on the real experiences. I had to say that I got furious on my heart when I was on my adaptability process, then it had to be ruined by that kind of person.

    In my activity of study, I feel quite comfortable on it so far. I could follow how it flows, and I hope it would goes that way always. I got good relationship with most of lecturer, and I had to get some benefits from it, means that I had to build some strong connections. All of the subjects was fun and interesting, but my favorite one was reading subject. There, you could express all things that on your mind without any borders, I mean not such a text book things. No offends for other subjects.

    I was happy about how lecturers treat me so far. They were so kind, even though we couldn’t get so intimate yet, cause I understood That we were a freshmen here.

    Like I said before, all of these things were only a few parts of my process of life in UPI. It would always changing and has different colors and tastes everyday, I hope so. There’s always little prays on my heart to always begging, and directed through the straight path of the life in this wicked world.

    • ?????
    • November 27th, 2008

    test, test, test

    aq ngumpulnya terakhir aja deh
    tunggu tmen2 yg laen
    whahahaha

    • aris rs…..
    • November 27th, 2008

    Dear my diary….
    I was graduated my senior high school. Sometimes I was happy, but I must separate with my friends. I had many memories in my senior high school. I remembered about very surprised day.
    It was Sunday at 27 April 2008. At my school there were band competitions with all bands from senior high school in my town as participants. I was committee, even it wasn’t clear what I did, the important I looked so busy. At 09.00 am some of participants have come, one by one the participants performed to the stage, the situation was so crowded. At 11.oo am I was surprised when I saw one of personnel band that was performing or singing in the stage. He was my best friend when we were in Junior High School. He went out to other city with his family. His name is Rahmat.
    I waited for him until he finished singing and went down from the stage, then we looked each other, he called my name. I could feel he was so happy and surprise meet me. So did I. We talked each other.
    I had other memories too. So I can’t forget about my days in Senior High School. Now some of my friends went to other city to study and some worked to capital city, in last holiday when I went back to my town, my friend invited me to her marriage. Her name is Dini. I was present the ceremony. My friends came, they wearing Batik. Than we talked about the University, work, until about funny stories in other city.
    Now I am school in UPI (Indonesian University of Education) in Bandung the crowded city, hot, but sometimes very cold. The first time I didn’t like the situations, but I must already determine it. I ever called my Mom and tell about my story, I cried in fro0nt of mosque. I said about my problem, my activities, or my bad story.
    My Mother said “You must be strong man, son” and it’s was made me sad. I remembered when I am live in my home, when I was hungry there are many foods in my dinning room or when I sick my Mother always called the doctor. She always protected me in all situations.
    I said “I love you Mom”
    To be continued…..

  7. Irma Rizkiani
    0801276

    First time I came to Indonesia University of Education, I felt so amazing saw the buildings in the UPI. The buildings were very big, high, and new. UPI was very wide, sometimes I felt tired if I must walked to the class to the fifth floor without the elevator. I felt lucky because I could accept in here. Actually, many people want to join in this college. Although I ever want to join in other college, but I am proud because I have become the one of university student in UPI.
    Now, I have many new friends. They were very friendly, so I didn’t feel lonely although I didn’t know all of students in UPI. I always feel spirit if I will go to campus. I will find new things, new friends, new situations, new experiences, and many more. I also felt proud became the member of ESA (English Students Association). The seniors were very friendly, they always help me if I need some help.
    In english departement, I could find many things, I found many seniors who join in my class, in speaking class, and in listening class. All lectures in the English departement have been speaking English very well.
    My new friends were born in the other province a lot, but a part of them were born and still stayed in Bandung. Although I wasn’t yet know them before, but they are very friendly friend. I could share about my problems or just talked about our daily. They are so friendly, funny, and easygoing, some of them are talkative.
    I never know what will happen in later day, but I just thought that everything is going to be all right. Actually, the reality didn’t like my hopes. I got problems with one of my bestfriends. This was a little problem, I think, but she made this problem became bigger than before. I never want to interfere her live, but I was outwardly became someone who made her problems. I felt confused with her, because I didn’t know what happen, but she was angry to me. Finally, after I knew what happened, I tried to apologize although I felt she was wrong. We became back the bestfriend although we weren’t like before. That was one of my problems in my new college, I had to be patient, because this wasn’t end, but it was the beginning of my new live in college.

    • Siti Nurhasanah (0801278)
    • November 27th, 2008

    Siti Nurhasanah
    0801278
    B1
    When I Was In UPI

    It was a happy day. In the afternoon I met my old friends at BIP (Bandung Indah Plaza). We spent our time by laughing, playing, and joking together. We were very happy, because we could get together again after two years.
    One of my friends, Emil, went to my home and slept there. I was very pleasure, because she is my closest friend. In the night she asked me, “Nur, how about your UPI test? Have you got an announcement about it?” I just smiled at Emil, and I shook my head then said, “No, I haven’t, but the announcement will be given tonight at 12 AM. I’m very nerves, Mil!”
    “oww! You shouldn’t! I believe you’ll be UPI’s student,” said Emil tried to calm me down. I looked at her, smiled, and told her about my test. We shared our story all the night, and when the clock showed 12 AM Emil asked me to find out my test result in the internet. Then, I went to the living room, switched on my computer, and began to search the result. It didn’t take a long time to get UPI’s web, because probably I was the first person who opened the web. When I got UPI’s web, I put my full name, Siti Nurhasanah, than I clicked “enter” button. My heart was beat very fast. Then, the monitor showed me the letter
    “Congratulation you have been received at English Language and Literature Program at UPI”. Directly I screamed “Horrreeeee!!!”
    @@@
    It was sunny day. The sun sheds his light and hot to the entire campus. The weather was very hot, and so did the BAAK room. I sat on the chair, wrote my identity on the piece of paper which was given by the official. There were many people, they were doing the same thing with me. I felt bore, because the queue was very long. But, I should be patient. After I passed the long queue, I went to the next room to take the picture for my student card. In that room I had to wait again. It was so boring. Then after I took the picture I went out, and in the out side there were many people stood a line. They were students of UPI from various Faculties and programs. They were waiting for new student. I passed them, and they asked me what my program was. Then one boy came to me “English program?” he asked.
    “Yes” I replied.
    “Come with me! You have to take your university coat. Have you paid for it?” He said.
    “Paid for what? I just have paid for the university to the bank. It is same?” I asked.
    “No, it’s not.”
    “So, what should I do?”
    “You can back to BAAK room and pay your coat in front of BAAK room, or you can back again tomorrow”
    I didn’t want to back for tomorrow, because my home is very far away from UPI. But, I also didn’t want back to BAAK room, because it means I had to wait for the queue again. I sat down to think the best choice for it. And I decided to back to BAAK room.
    After I passed again a long queue, I met again him. “I have paid” I said.
    “ow, that’s good. Now, follow me to PKM to take your university coat”
    I followed him through the hot way. And when we arrived in front of PKM building, he said that I had to enter the building alone. So, I entered and I went up to the second floor of the building. There, I had to wait again. And I felt born again.
    @@@
    Every university had orientation event for their new students, and so did UPI. The orientation event was held in three days. I was very zealous with that. I prepared every thing for it.
    “The orientation event is started at 6 AM. No one allowed coming late! ” said the senior. I heard it, and wrote it on my small book. Than I told to my mind, “I have to come here on time. But, what time should I go from home? While it takes two hours to get here from home. Should I go at 4 AM? But, it is very early morning, and I afraid if there is no public transportation at the station.” I though and I though until my home town friend allowed me to sleep at her dorm for three days. “Thank you friend,” I said.
    First day of orientation was the opening of orientation event by the rector of the university. It was held in Gymnasium building. The event was very interesting. There were dancers who danced Traditional Modern dance. They were very beautiful and amazing. There was also the choir of UPI. They sang Indonesian Song, UPI song, and National song. Their voices were very nice. They made a beautiful harmony. They amazed me.
    Second day of Orientation was the introduction about the university, student of university, and the use of organization in the university. It made felt bored, because I just sat down on the chair and listened to the speaker.
    The last day of orientation was the closing of the event. It was same as the firs day, but the interesting part in this day was at the end of the closing. When it was closed to the end of event I put my University coat beside me and listened to the rector who gave the speech. I didn’t care about the speech, because I focus to balloons above me. When the rector finished his speech, the senior asked the students to wear the coat. Then, balloons began to fall above us, and we screamed “howreeee…!” Some seniors sprang me with the water until I got wet. Then, I returned home happily, and brought with me sweet memory of orientation.
    @@@
    My first week in my new environment of university was interesting, because I could find new friends, and new experiences. I love searching new experiences and friends.
    In this new week I met Bella, Herlin, Ica, Mieke, Yaris, Tia, Selvi, Eva, Ierma, and other new friends. They are my classmate. But, the first person I met in this week was Herlin. I met her when I saw the schedule of my class. She asked me about the schedule and then she asked my name and phone number. From that, I became her friend till now.
    In this week, I tried to adapt my self with new schedule, new environment, and new people. While I was adapting, there were many new interesting experiences I got. One of them was the experience in became Best Speaker at English Speaking Community. I was surprised with this, because in the second meeting I could be The Best Speaker of the week.
    @@@
    After several weeks, I became more accustomed with all things. With schedule, lectures, Lessons, friends, and UPI are. I enjoyed my study and my activities at the university. Some times I found many difficulties in study a thing. But, I always try to do my best, keep studying, and never give up. Because, I think god creates human with the huge potential. So, there’s no thing people can do, if they try hard and believe they can do it.
    On my free time I used to go around UPI with my friends, Belle, Herlin, Ica, and Mieke. Some time we went to another faculty to look around or just sit there. One funny story when we went around is when we went to MIPA building.
    While we were waiting the lesson, we went to MIPA building’s cafeteria. I bought rice with an egg fried and a fresh tea. Herlin wanted to eat ‘Empek-empek’. So, I asked a man behind me who I thought a servant, “A, is there any ‘Empek-empek’?” The man looked me gaze and said, “Sorry, I don’t know about it. I don’t work here.” I suppressed and felt very shy. I subdued my head and said, “I’m sorry I think you are…” Then, I walked quickly and sat shyly.
    @@@
    Two weeks ago I had a midterm test. The first I had Reading test. The test was about previewing and predicting a poem. I found difficulties in making a relation between the poem and the real world. The second I had Writing test. The test was about subject verb agreement, narrative text, and conjunction. I was very careless when I did this test. So, there were many falsies in my answer. The third I had listening test. The test held at the laboratory of language. And the last test I had speaking test. In this test I realized that my speaking skill wasn’t good enough. But, I will always trained my self in order I can speak English fluently.
    I will always try to repair my self and improve my self in English or in every thing, because I don’t want to spend my time uselessly. That’s why I will keep fighting and keep praying to god for my better life.

    The End

    • Selvia Neilil (0801277)
    • November 30th, 2008

    Selvia Neilil
    B1

    I’m very asttonished when I see UPI’s building because this building is very big. I am proud can learn in here because not all people can enter in UPI. Many people say that UPI is the best quality university, especially in litearture. UPI has got four rank University in Indonesia.
    I choose English Literature because english is important languange in the world and if I can fluent speak english so anywhere, anytime if we study in other country I feel didn’t difficult to communication with other people in the world. English literature is the best faculty in UPI. Many facilities in UPI to carry out talent.
    Everyday I went to campus at 6.00 a.m. From my home to Setiabudhi was far enough. After I finished pray ‘subuh’ directly I took a bath and prepared something. Every morning, in Jakarta street was always crowded because many people who would went to work and many students who would went to school. The conditions of it make me lazy to drive a car.
    In B1 class I have many friends with different characters. This semester I was having best friend. The characters of them were like me if I chatted something they are very match with my chat.

    To be continue……

    • Septiani Rahmawati
    • November 30th, 2008

    ORIENTATION .

    It was on June 12nd early morning when i had to go to UPI to participate the UM-test. I felt very nervous because it was the first time i came to UPI. I didn’t know much about it. I also felt very worried because i worried if i couldn’t answer all teh questions that could make me didn’t pass the test. But my mom said that i must be could do it and with all support from my whole family, i felt a little bit relax.
    On eight o’clock the test was begun. The first part of the test was “Tes Potensi Akademik (TPA)”. It contains the psychological test and aritmatic test. I felt very dissapointed because i thought that i couldn’t do the first part of the test well. After that, i had to do the second part of the test. It was the English test. When i read the questions i felt very happy because the questions was a little bit easy. I could answer all the questions eventhough i didn’t know if my answer was right or wrong. After that, on 11.40 a.m i got break time to had a lunch and pray. On 01.00 p.m i had to do the last part of the test. It was the Indonesian test. It was rahter difficult because there were some questions that i couldn’t understand well. But some of that questions was the question that i found on my last exam in senior high. Finally, the test was over on three o’clock. On my way went home i was thinking about the the test because i didn’t think that i could pass it.
    Day after day, i was waiting for long time to know the result of the test. It was Wednesday morning on June 25th when i checked to the internet to see the result. I felt very surprise, happy, sad, shock, and all the weird feeling when i saw that my name was there. I passed the test! My parents and I felt very glad and grateful about that.

    • nAbiLAH Fairuz Al-Bantany (0800062)
    • November 30th, 2008

    MY CLASS, MY CONFUSION

    My name is Nabilah Fairuz Al-Bantany. You can call me Bella because my friends and my families called me so. I was eighteen years old. I was in college. I have been accepted as a new student on Education University of Indonesia (UPI) in English Department by PM DK.
    I was happy and proud to be in this college. I was happy because I was one of the happiest and luckiest students from thousand students who have been accepted on UPI because UPI is one of PTN (Public University) in Indonesia. Beside that, UPI is one of the best and biggest Universities in Indonesia. Even more, UPI is the chosen University in the world. UPI is one of the best 5 thousand Universities in the world. I must be proud of it. There were too many students who have registered but they were not accepted on UPI because of several reasons such as failed on the entered-test and lacked of money, etc.
    I felt so worry and nervous. Why? Because I was in English Department of UPI. It’s the best and the most competitive department on UPI even in Indonesia. All of the students in this department are the best and outstanding students. I saw new possibilities, opportunities and challenges. It made me changed my way of life. I must be better than before. I must do my best. I mustn’t be left behind by others.
    On the first day, I met my classmates. We are in B1 class, the language and literature programs. But, we did neither talk a lot nor have a good conversation among us. I didn’t know who they are and where they come from. I did neither recognize nor know their names. What was their typical? Were they easygoing, selfish or too clever? I didn’t know it at first.
    I wrote my lesson schedule. I looked at the lesson. There are reading, speaking, listening and writing lesson. There is also a general lesson. They are religion and Bahasa Indonesia lesson. I also looked at the names of the lecturers. There are Mrs. Nia Nafisah, Mr. Ruswan Dalyono, and etc. But, I didn’t recognize all of them. How if I thought by unkind lecturer? Now if the way of lecturer gives a lesson is not suitable or too tight for me? What about getting “C” on my report? I hope it wouldn’t happen. But, nobody knew about it.

    @@@

    Several weeks after the class started have passed. Now, I knew not only all of the names of my classmates but also the names of my lecturers. But I found difficulties in understanding their characteristic.
    Meizar, he was the class leader of b1 class. He was chubby and active. He was from Purwakarta and he often talked a lot about his hometown.
    “My name is Meizar but you can call me ijey.” he said.
    “May I have your cellular phone number?” asked me.
    Then, he gave his number. Oh, my god! I was like a fan who asked her idol’s number. How important he was.
    That’s the beginning of our friendship.
    He spoke English fluently and his English was so good. But sometimes, he spoke English so excessively.
    “I am from Purwakarda.” he said.
    He tried to show his ability in speaking English and in understanding the lesson. He responded what were the lecturers said very quickly. Yes, he really was. He was able to do that. But sometimes, it was too much.
    “Yeah, of course.” he ever said so when one of our lecturer explained the lesson. He said those words in a very loud voice. He tried to impress what he was saying. Maybe our lecturer could stop her explanation because of his voice. It made me and my friends laughed.
    He was super active and show off. Sometimes, I was disturbed by it. I was so annoyed. Just imagined, when I concentrated well to the teacher’s explanation, a very loud voice like the thunder swept the class down. It destroyed our mind. Ha-ha, it was so extraordinary.

    My day was getting worse when I realized something. I was not good in reading lesson. I was so lazy to read book, newspaper or magazine in Bahasa Indonesia even in English. My lecturer who taught reading lesson was Mrs. Nicke Yunita Moecharam. She was a hard worker and discipline lecturer.
    One day, when we were in class. She asked us to make a group of five students. I belonged to a group with Herlin, Meike, etc. She ordered us to do exercise on the book. I had already done it.
    “Why do we have to be in a group?” I asked.
    “You must discuss your answer with your group.” said her.
    After the class ended…
    “Nabilah, do you have any problems in a group?” asked her.
    “No, I just confuse why we have to be in a group.” I said.
    “If you have any problem with my class, just tell me!” she said.
    I didn’t answer anything. I was like stung by thousands bees.
    My friends looked at me. It was so bad. I was blaming myself.
    The next several days…

    (TO BE CONTINUED…)

    chayOO..
    _NbL_

    • nAbiLAH Fairuz Al-Bantany (0800062)
    • November 30th, 2008

    Do The BeSt Lah SmuaNy,,

    Nie Utk HdUp Dn Mti Qta..
    HAHAHaaa

    cHaYooo..

    • Yulizar Komarawn (0808299)
    • December 1st, 2008

    Last august was a month which decided my education fate. That month would be announced the result of the SNMPTN. I was very afraid. If I didn’t accept in the university this year, I would lose a chance to be a student university. After I waited and waited, the announcement had come. Fortunately, I could be accepted in Indonesian university of education. I accepted in English language and literature program. I was very happy because I could taste to be Student University.
    A few days I went to in Indonesian university of education as soon as possible in order to pay registration. When I entered Indonesian University of Education which is located in north Bandung, I was charmed. The high buildings are looked very beautiful. It is a new building. Besides that an old building which called Isola attracted my attention. The old building is looked very clean. Even though, the environmental was very clean, tidy and green.
    The general lecture had begun. I began lecturer with general lecturer. It was called “mimosa”. As long as Mimosa I stayed in Arif’s boarding house. He wasn’t mind, if I stayed with him for temporary. I enjoy attending general lecturer. If I had problem about general lecturer, I could ask to Arif. He would help me.
    After a few days the general lecturer had been finished. So, I prepared myself to attend lecturer in class. Before the lecturer was begun, I went home in Majalengka. I told my experience to my parent in the afternoon. Suddenly, arifs’s father came when I was talking with my parent. Firstly he asked to me how my lecturer was. Then he told about arif’s boarding house. He asked to that Arif’s boarding house was too small for two people. He also asked to me that arif would bring computer. So, the boarding house was getting smaller, if I was still there. I was startled at hearing it. I thought arif’s father had me go from arif’s boarding house. After that I went to Bandung. I asked to arif that I would move from his boarding house as soon as possible. I also told about his father who came to my house. He suggested me in order to move after Idul Fitri. But I decided to move as soon as possible.
    A few days later I searched a boarding house. I found a boarding house in panorama 2. I looked it. I thought it made me compatible. So, I told to my parent that I agreed in order to stay there.
    Two days later I moved from arif boarding house. Before I moved, I said thanks to arif because he had given me a place in order to have a rest as long as I attended general lecturer. He asked to me “why do you move today?” I answered “I didn’t want to make you busy again”. He offered me in order to move after lebaran. But I had decided to move that day. So, I took my things in arif boarding house.
    After I moved from arif’s boarding house, I stay in my boarding house in panorama. There I felt something which was different. I felt very quiet. I always remembered my families at home. I always missed them. Sometime I thought that I want to go home but if I did it, I would my parent sad.
    I was very boring in my boarding house. So, I decided to go to my friend. In my friend I was very happy and I could forget my bored for temporary. But went I went to my boarding house I would feel boring again.

    • Rendy Dyonata
    • December 1st, 2008

    It’s the story f the young man came from the other area whom want to continue his studies to Bandung. My name is Rendy Dyonata. I was graduated from a senior high school in Malang. I moved to Bandung it cause some reason. In that time I was confused, where I should to continue my school?. I prefer to entered to UNPAD took International Relations program. My parents agreed with my plans, but my father asked me to try test in UPI. He asked me to try that test. He advised me to take English program non education. I felt strange with this university, I never heard about this university before. For a moment I thought “Is it fine if I entered in this university? , I felt doubt about it”. But I decided to try this test, hopefully might be I will knows lot of about this collage. I remembered, that 13 June 2008, that is for the first time I came in UPI.” Oh my God, it’s very big. I never saw university bigger than this university” I said it to my father. In that moment I thought” Forget about UNPAD, I hope I can enter in this university”.

    25 June 2008, that is became one of unforgettable day in whole of my life. One week before that day, I went to Malang to finish some administration on there. Suddenly I have one call from my father. My father said “Son, you passed the test in UPI, you will be a student on there “. “ Oh my God, thank you very much, its mean my job was done”. I said it in my heart. This remarkable appreciation I could entered in UPI. After I finished the administration in Malang, I went back to Bandung. 5 August 2008, I did the registration for new student. I never thought it will take a long time, I thought its just registration. But after registration I should met with senior (same program). I thought senior will be ruder or might be not friendly. But it’s false, the senior is very welcome an they very friendly. We talked a lot of things, such as about the intern organization in our program and about MIMOSA (week for new student).

    I took so long time before I got MIMOSA, almost two weeks. Along those two weeks, I thought “did I can adapt in this new environment? I will meet with new people and different languages than mine”. 26 September 2008, Mimosa was held. I thought something bad will happen during that event. But in fact, this event was very interesting an incredible event even though it was very tired event. I met with someone new and I got a lot of new experience. It was held in four day. In the last it’s an interesting one. After closing ceremony of MIMOSA, we all the new student have a time to wear our coat. I’m very proud about it.

    Two days later, it’s for the first time I met with my classmates. I met with Meizar, Yulizar and other. I hope I could adapt with my new friend. Two days later, that is for the first time I came in the class. I remembered, the first class which I entered is the Writing class. That is for the first time felt like someone strange in this class. At that that time. I met new friends such as Aris, Arif, and many more. I’ve one problem for the first time I met my friends. The problem is the languages. Most of them used Sunda languages.

    Day in day was out. For the first month I still tried to adapt with this new situation. I tried to adapt how to learn in university. Is it any different with senior high school? . My friendships with my friends are getting closer. Some time we’ve shared about a lot of, such as our hometown (cause most of us from out of Bandung). Especially my men friends, we usually talked about music and girls. Sometimes they gives me some advices to make me become better man.

    Fasting month is come.

    To be continued ( still in progress)

    • Herlin Octaviani
    • December 1st, 2008

    test…

    • Herlin octaviani
    • December 1st, 2008

    My First Semester in UPI

    At the first time I study in UPI, I had a difficulty to find room 05.225. I asked someone at the first floor, and then she said that room should be at the fifth floor. The lift is out of order, so I decided to climb the stairs. I thought it was so easy to climb the stairs until the fifth floor, but it wasn’t easy as I thought. I felt so tired even I couldn’t felt my legs. I arrived to the fifth floor with sweaty face and bad hair style. Then I met two girls named Nabila and Istia. I asked them where the room 05.225 was, and they said they had a same purpose with me to find room 05.225 but they couldn’t find the room in this floor. Finally Ma’am Nia, our writing lecturer, came to the fifth floor and we told her that the room wasn’t exist, then she told us it might be in the next building. Then we decided to find the room, but the door to the next building are closed, so we had to go down stairs then climbed again to the next building. Finally we found room 05.225. The other students were already arrived, but we were lucky to come with our lecturer. My Impression when the first time I saw my classmate, they were looked unkind and individual kind. It seemed that it wouldn’t be easy to make a friend with them.

    My first week in UPI seemed an age. I’m not usual with anything, included the schedule, but that’s ok; maybe I’m just a new kid on the block. I tried to feel comfortable with anything, because to get in UPI; I faced with lots of things. I ever joined UM-UPI, but my stupid ness I read a wrong schedule. I thought it was begin at one o’clock and the real test should be stared at eight o’clock, so I’m disqualified. My parents were very disappointed. Then my mother asked me to join LPKIA test. I passed the test, but I didn’t felt happy at all; because my feeling still in UPI. I tried my luck to join SNMPTN test, but I’m not felt confidence at that time, because there were only 80.000 from 350.000 participant would be accept. I had my luckiness, and I passed the test. I had back my confidence and my parents were proud on me. Everything seemed to be beautiful at that time. In my flash back I realized that I have to fight everything that makes me drop.

    On the third weeks, I started to have my confidence and getting used with all of the things. Beside that I also have some close friends, they are; Istia, Nur, Meike and Bela. They have their own character. Istia is a dangdut lover. Her favorite song is “Keong Racun”. There’s no wonder why she loves dangdut, she came from Garut by the way. Nur is a Sudanese girl. She came from Ciparay and she like to makes joke in Ciparay style. Meike came from Bangka and I called her sandals girl. She usually goes to FPBS with her sandals then change it with the proper shoes, and when the class were finish she change again with the sandals. The last is Bela, she came from Cilegon. I’d never heard that place before she told me, and she said it located near Banten. She is Cinta Laura lover, and she likes to sing Cinta Laura songs in every occasion. It’s really fun to make friends with them.

    One day after writing class, Me, Meike, Istia, Bela and Nur decided to go to MIPA canteen. We pretended our self as an under covered students from FPBS. Finally we arrived in MIPA canteen and we were lucky to have an empty table on the left corner. Then we ordered foods with our own taste. I told Nur that I really want to “empe-empe” at that time. Then Nur asked someone that just went outside canteen kitchen, that she thought he was canteens waiter.
    ‘Is there any empe-empe in here?’ Nur asked.
    But the man kept stared at her and then said
    ‘I’m sorry you’ve got a wrong person. Ask someone over there!’ his high notation sounds.
    Nur felt ashamed and said
    ‘Ops! Sorry.’ Then she left quickly.
    I laughed at her, I’m the one who need that food but Nur who get the embarrassed it. Haha ^_^
    ‘ Don’t worry Nur. At least you won’t see him at FPBS.’ I said.

    After we had lunch, we decided to walk around MIPA building. We went to the forth floor by lift and it was larger than FPBS lift. As large it was, it shake harder too. We’re shaken by the lift, until it was more like a local earthquake. The foods that we already eat it seemed want to come out from our full stomach. What a villager!!. Finally we came to the fourth floor, but we still felt the shake. Then we went to the toilet and photograph our self. ^_^. Times up! We must send our body’s back to FPBS. We’re still having Listening class.

    There’s always sadness behind happiness. On 16 October 2008, I lost my cell phone and wallet in Al’Furqon. The thief must be an old player, because it was a few seconds’ lose. I told the security about my loses, but there was only one security from four who looks cared and be able to help me. The other looked uncared and some of them made jokes on me. I felt unrespectable, as a woman and as a human as well. I wonder how can they get their job as public services?. What if it’s happen to their family? Is there any joke?

    But I tried to feel calmed. My friend Nur, lend me some money so I can called someone. I called my boyfriend and told him what was happened to me. He was shocked and quickly took me to the police station.

    Now I realized that college life is a little bit different. I can except all of the things and enjoy it. Life goes on! ^_^

    • Herlin octaviani
    • December 1st, 2008

    ko ga bisa di submit sih?????!!!!!!

  8. @Meizar
    Your story can be classified as more descriptive than narrative text. It is as if you’re writing a letter to someone back home about your life in UPI. There is no climax in your story. You could use some parts of the current story as the orientation or resolution of the revised one next time. Try to compare your work with Eva’s or Nur’s. You can see the differences.

    Some grammatical corrections:
    I never knew that UPI’s (reputations was) greater than I ever thought.
    (You know, just like another boys who rent some rooms). –not a good sentence
    I just (couldn’t settled) it up yet.
    She broke up with (her old boyfriend, that) was …
    I often upset when I met one of my friends who was selfish, it was true, [?] it was based on the real experiences.
    They were so kind, even though we couldn’t get so intimate yet, (cause) I understood[?] That we were a freshmen here.

    @Aris
    Don’t stray too much on details that are not too related with your main topic in your story. Try to finish it soon.

    Some grammatical corrections:
    and (it’s was) made me sad
    I was present [?] the ceremony.

    @Irma
    The complication in your story should be described in more detailed way. I think the last paragraph should be broken down into more paragraphs telling the readers what actually happened or might happen while you’re dealing with your problems.

    Some grammatical corrections:
    I felt so amazing (saw) the buildings in the UPI
    The buildings (were) very big, high, and new
    UPI (was) very wide, sometimes I felt tired if I must walked to the class to the fifth floor without the elevator.
    I felt lucky because I (could accept) in here.
    In (english) departement
    Although I ever want to join in other college,(but) I am proud because I have become the one of university student in UPI.
    They (were) very friendly
    I always (feel spirit) if I will go to campus
    . I also felt proud (became) the member of ESA
    Although I (wasn’t yet know) them before,

    @Nur
    Your story is actually more like a collection of diary entries that you’ve written so far. What I meant you to write is find one main topic that you like and use your diary entries to help you in the content of the story. You don’t have to put almost all of your diary entries in the story. Please choose one main topiv only and develop the story based on that topic

    Some grammatical corrections:
    I’m very (nerves), Mil!”
    My heart (was beat) very fast.
    . The weather was very hot, and so (did) the BAAK room.
    I (felt bore), because …
    (But,) I should be patient.
    And I felt (born) again.
    .(” I though and I though) until my home town friend allowed me to sleep at her dorm for three days. “Thank you friend,” I said.
    It was same as the (firs) day,
    They are my (classmate).
    I tried to adapt (my self)…
    So, there were many (falsies) in my answer.
    The test (held) at the laboratory of language
    (But, I will always trained my self) in order I can speak English fluently.

    @Selvia
    I’m sure your story is still far from finish, so try to complete it this week. Choose one main topic and develop the story based on the topic chosesn. Don’t stray on details that are not too related with the main topic.

    Some grammatical corrections:
    (I’m) very asttonished
    I am proud (can learn) in here …
    because (english) is important languange in the world
    I choose English Literature because english is important languange in the world and if I can (fluent) speak english so anywhere, anytime if we study in other country I feel didn’t difficult to communication with other people in the world. –the sentence is too long
    Many facilities in UPI (to carry out talent).
    This semester I (was having) best friend.

    @Nabila
    This story already has a good orientation and the beginning complications, so you could develop the story until it is complete.

    Some grammatical corrections:
    (Why? )Because I (was) in English Department of UPI.
    How if I (thought) by unkind lecturer?

    @Yulizar
    You have written a good orientation and the beginning of complications. Try to develop more based on the main topic. I think the topic could be about how you deal with your boredom.

    Some grammatical corrections:
    That month (would be announced the result of the SNMPTN).
    I would lose a chance to be (a student university).
    I was very happy because I could (taste to be Student University).
    The high buildings (are looked) very beautiful
    The old building (is looked) very clean. (Even though,) the environmental was very clean, tidy and green.
    I began (lecturer) with general lecturer.
    Before the (lecturer) was begun, I went home in Majalengka.
    Sometime I thought that I want to go home (but if I did it, I would my parent sad).
    I was very (boring) in my boarding house.
    I could forget (my bored) for temporary. (But went) I went to my boarding house I would feel boring again.

    @Rendy
    You should try to focus the story on one main topic. You don’t have to write the not-too-related details. Let the readers know how you deal with your problems in complications. In the end, tell the readers how you deal with your problems.

    Some grammatical corrections:
    I moved to Bandung (it cause some reason).
    In that time I was confused, where I should to continue my school(?.)
    I prefer to entered to UNPAD (took) International Relations program.
    But I decided to try this test, hopefully (might be I will knows) lot of about this collage.
    ” Oh my God, thank you very much, (its mean) my job was done”.
    (This remarkable appreciation) I could entered in UPI.
    I thought (its just registration).
    . But it’s false, (the senior is) very welcome (an) they very friendly.
    Along those two weeks, I thought “(did I can adapt) in this new environment?
    , this event was very interesting (an) incredible event even though it was very (tired event).
    Most of them used (Sunda) languages.
    (Day in day was out).
    Especially (my men friends),

    • hamdan
    • December 2nd, 2008

    @Septiani
    OK, this is a good orientation. You should just continue the story

    @Herlin
    Try to find connection among the events that you’ve described in the story. Don’t make it just like a series of events. Put complications in it.

    Some grammatical corrections:
    I felt so tired even I couldn’t (felt) my legs.
    but the door to the next building (are) closed,
    It seemed that it wouldn’t be easy to make (a friend) with them.
    I’m not usual with anything (, included) the schedule,
    I tried to feel comfortable with (anything), (because to get in UPI);
    I thought it (was begin) at one o’clock and the real test (should be stared ) at eight o’clock, so (I’m disqualified).
    but (I’m not felt) confidence at that time, because there were only 80.000 from 350.000 participant (would be accept).
    In my flash back I realized that I have to fight everything that (makes) me drop.
    Nur is a (Sudanese) girl.
    when the class (were finish she change) again with the sandals.
    We pretended our self as an (under covered) students from FPBS.

  9. knapa susahh nge post ??

  10. My Best Friends

    First day when I stepped foot in front of a room that it became my new class, I saw around of the room and some college students who looked busy with their activities. I thought that the class was my new class and they would be my classmates.
    I sat and talked with one of female students on my left side. Her name is Irma. She came from Bandung. We chatted about how we could get in Education University of Indonesia especially English Department. Apart of her, I introduced my self to Selvi. She sat next to Irma. She came from Tasikmalaya. She lived in Bandung with her cousin. And then, I walked slowly around the class and acquainted with other students. They came from different cities. A few minutes later, a female student entered the class late and she sat in a chair behind me. When I saw toward her, I already knew her. Actually, she was Tia, my friend in English course when we were in senior high school. So, we chatted and told story each other.
    Our friendship was getting closer. It began when we were in same group for speaking subject. Apart of that, we had same hobby, it was dress up. Before enter to the class for joining the meeting, we used time for dressing up in bathroom. It was very pleasure become their close friend. They could manage the time for studying and taking a walk. They gave a lot of good advices for me who has younger age than them. If I had a problem, I could share it to them.
    I got more friends when I met other college students from class C1 in Windy’s rent house. Actually, I already know some of them like, Ami and Kean. They were my friends in senior high school. However, Windy introduced me to her other friends. Minda, Dhanni, Bayu, Ajeng, Desti, Fajar, Dhea were my new friends. They were very nice to me. One thing I like from their characteristic was they liked joking. We humiliated each other but no one between us felt offended.
    One day, Kean invited me to join and come to Saung Sadu in Soreang. He asked me for fishing together with other students from his class. We fished, have a lunch and taken some pictures there. I felt very comfortable around them. They were more attractive than my close friends in class B1. That made me happier stayed with them than with my friends in B1 because I was a talkative person too.
    Apart of that if they were assembling in Windy’s rent house, one of them sent message to me and invited me. And then if they were organizing some events, they asked me to join.
    Confusion happened when Kean asked me to move on to his class. Apart of Kean, the other students from class C1 invited me to move. So, their class would more crowd. Actually, I wanted to move on because I already became a sister between them. I was very glad staying around them. They were very cohesive.
    I told my planning to one of my close friends, Irma. She was little surprise but she heard my story until finish. After she heard my story, she didn’t agree with my planning because if I moved to class C1, class B1 would more silent. Because of the encouragement from my friends in class C1, I intended to move class. Irma gave me advice that to move on other class was very difficult and busy.
    Actually, I didn’t bring my self to leave class B1 and my best friends; Irma, Tia and Selvi. If I could move them I wanted they move on with me too but it was not impossible. Class C1 only could add one or two new students.
    To make me easier, Kean, Ajeng, and Ami would try for helping me to move class. I could move on in second semester. I knew to arrange this one is very busy but the students of C1 would help me. If I couldn’t move on to class C1, I would stay in B1 but my friends in C1 would still become my best friends.
    After the final exam finished, my friends in class B1 went to their hometowns, but I was still in Bandung to manage my removal from class B1 to C1. Fortunately, I was accompanied by Kean and Ajeng from class C1 to manage my problem. Kean accompanied me to BAAK in campus to ask the requirements of my removal. One of the committee in BAAK told some requirements to me. I had to fill a personality data and a form that contained my reason to move on another class. Apart of that, one of my parents had to give the signature on the form. After that, I had to meet the leader of English Department, Mr. Wahyu in his office and gave the form to him.
    First day, I was accompanied with Ajeng to BAAK. I filled the form, wrote my reason to move on, and asked my mother to give her signature. After I could fill the requirement in first day, I called Mr. Wahyu. Unfortunately, Mr. Wahyu didn’t come that day. He returned to his hometown for some days. He asked me to come to his office three days later.
    Three days later, Ajeng, Kean, and I came to the campus anymore and visited Mr. Wahyu’s office. I couldn’t find Mr. Wahyu there. And then, Kean called Mr. Wahyu anymore. Apparently, Mr. Wahyu would come to campus on 11 o’clock. I was very fed up and so sorry to Kean and Ajeng.
    During we waited for Mr. Wahyu, we went to Gerlong and looked for some foods. After we got a lunch, we returned to Mr. Wahyu’s office and apparently Mr. Wahyu was there. And then, I described the reason that made me wanted to visit him. Before he gave his signature on my form, he asked my reason to move on another class. 30 minutes passed, finally Mr. Wahyu gave his signature on my form. After I gave the permission of Mr. Wahyu to move on another class, we returned to BAAK and submitted the form. The committee in BAAK would manage the new KRS for me for five days.

    to be continue .

  11. complication .

    After the final exam finished, my friends in class B1 went to their hometowns, but I was still in Bandung to manage my removal from class B1 to C1. Fortunately, I was accompanied by Kean and Ajeng from class C1 to manage my problem. Kean accompanied me to BAAK in campus to ask the requirements of my removal. One of the committee in BAAK told some requirements to me. I had to fill a personality data and a form that contained my reason to move on another class. Apart of that, one of my parents had to give the signature on the form. After that, I had to meet the leader of English Department, Mr. Wahyu in his office and gave the form to him.
    First day, I was accompanied with Ajeng to BAAK. I filled the form, wrote my reason to move on, and asked my mother to give her signature. After I could fill the requirement in first day, I called Mr. Wahyu. Unfortunately, Mr. Wahyu didn’t come that day. He returned to his hometown for some days. He asked me to come to his office three days later.
    Three days later, Ajeng, Kean, and I came to the campus anymore and visited Mr. Wahyu’s office. I couldn’t find Mr. Wahyu there. And then, Kean called Mr. Wahyu anymore. Apparently, Mr. Wahyu would come to campus on 11 o’clock. I was very fed up and so sorry to Kean and Ajeng.
    During we waited for Mr. Wahyu, we went to Gerlong and looked for some foods. After we got a lunch, we returned to Mr. Wahyu’s office and apparently Mr. Wahyu was there. And then, I described the reason that made me wanted to visit him. Before he gave his signature on my form, he asked my reason to move on another class. 30 minutes passed, finally Mr. Wahyu gave his signature on my form. After I gave the permission of Mr. Wahyu to move on another class, we returned to BAAK and submitted the form. The committee in BAAK would manage the new KRS for me for five days.

    to be continue .

    p.s. it was difficult to combine the orientation with the complication. i couldnt send all of thyhat . i just sent the complication.

  12. complication .

    After the final exam finished, my friends in class B1 went to their hometowns, but I was still in Bandung to manage my removal from class B1 to C1. Fortunately, I was accompanied by Kean and Ajeng from class C1 to manage my problem. Kean accompanied me to BAAK in campus to ask the requirements of my removal. One of the committee in BAAK told some requirements to me. I had to fill a personality data and a form that contained my reason to move on another class. Apart of that, one of my parents had to give the signature on the form. After that, I had to meet the leader of English Department, Mr. Wahyu in his office and gave the form to him.
    First day, I was accompanied with Ajeng to BAAK. I filled the form, wrote my reason to move on, and asked my mother to give her signature. After I could fill the requirement in first day, I called Mr. Wahyu. Unfortunately, Mr. Wahyu didn’t come that day. He returned to his hometown for some days. He asked me to come to his office three days later.
    Three days later, Ajeng, Kean, and I came to the campus anymore and visited Mr. Wahyu’s office. I couldn’t find Mr. Wahyu there. And then, Kean called Mr. Wahyu anymore. Apparently, Mr. Wahyu would come to campus on 11 o’clock. I was very fed up and so sorry to Kean and Ajeng.
    During we waited for Mr. Wahyu, we went to Gerlong and looked for some foods. After we got a lunch, we returned to Mr. Wahyu’s office and apparently Mr. Wahyu was there. And then, I described the reason that made me wanted to visit him. Before he gave his signature on my form, he asked my reason to move on another class. 30 minutes passed, finally Mr. Wahyu gave his signature on my form. After I gave the permission of Mr. Wahyu to move on another class, we returned to BAAK and submitted the form. The committee in BAAK would manage the new KRS for me for five days.

    to be continue .

    p.s.
    it was difficult to combine the orientation with the complication. i couldnt send all of thhat . i just sent the complication.

    • hamdan
    • December 2nd, 2008

    @Eva
    Keep up the good work. Your story already contain 1000 words. It’s just 500 more words and you’re done.

    Some grammatical corrections:
    We fished, (have a lunch) and (taken some pictures there).
    Three days later, Ajeng, Kean, and I came to the campus (anymore)…
    (During we waited for Mr. Wahyu, )

    • Herlin Octaviani
    • December 3rd, 2008

    Name: Herlin Octaviani (1B1)
    NIM: 0807535

    My First Semester in UPI

    At the first time I study in UPI, I had a difficulty to find room 05.225. I asked someone at the first floor, and then she said that room should be at the fifth floor. The lift is out of order, so I decided to climb the stairs. I thought it was so easy to climb the stairs until the fifth floor, but it wasn’t easy as I thought. I felt so tired even I couldn’t feel my legs. I arrived to the fifth floor with sweaty face and bad hair style. Then I met two girls named Nabila and Istia. I asked them where the room 05.225 was, and they said they had a same purpose with me to find room 05.225 but they couldn’t find the room in this floor. Finally Ma’am Nia, our writing lecturer, came to the fifth floor and we told her that the room wasn’t exist, then she told us it might be in the next building. Then we decided to find the room, but the door to the next building were closed, so we had to go down stairs then climbed again to the next building. Finally we found room 05.225. The other students were already arrived, but we were lucky to come with our lecturer. My Impression when the first time I saw my classmate, they were looked unkind and individual kind. It seemed that it wouldn’t be easy to make friends with them.
    My first week in UPI seemed an age. I’m not usual with anything, specially the schedule, but that’s ok; maybe I’m just a new kid on the block. I tried to feel comfortable, because to admit in UPI; I faced with lots of things. I ever joined UM-UPI, but my stupid ness I read a wrong schedule. I thought it was at one o’clock and the real test stared at eight o’clock, so I got disqualified. My parents were very disappointed. Then my mother asked me to join LPKIA test. I passed the test, but I didn’t felt happy at all; because my feeling still in UPI. I tried my luck to join SNMPTN test, but I’m not feel confidence at that time, because there were only 80.000 from 350.000 participant would be accepted. I had my luckiness, and I passed the test. I had back my confidence and my parents were proud on me. Everything seemed to be beautiful at that time. In my flash back I realized that I have to fight everything that makes me drop.
    On the third weeks, I started to have my confidence and getting used with all of the things. Beside that I also have some close friends, they are; Istia, Nur, Meike and Bela. They have their own character. Istia is a dangdut lover. Her favorite song is “Keong Racun”. There’s no wonder why she loves dangdut, she came from Garut by the way. Nur is a Sudanese. She came from Ciparay and she like to makes joke in Ciparay style. Meike came from Bangka and I called her sandals girl. She usually goes to FPBS with her sandals then change it with the proper shoes, and when the class were finish she changed again with her sandals. The last is Bela, she came from Cilegon. I’d never heard that place before she told me, and she said it located near Banten. She is Cinta Laura lover, and she likes to sing Cinta Laura songs in every occasion. It’s really fun to make friends with them.
    One day after writing class, Me, Meike, Istia, Bela and Nur decided to go to MIPA canteen. We pretended our self as an undercovered students from FPBS. Finally we arrived in MIPA canteen and we were lucky to have an empty table on the left corner. Then we ordered foods with our own taste. I told Nur that I really want to “empe-empe” at that time. Then Nur asked someone that just went outside canteen kitchen, that she thought he was canteens waiter.
    ‘Is there any empe-empe in here?’ Nur asked.
    But the man kept stared at her and then said
    ‘I’m sorry you’ve got a wrong person. Ask someone over there!’ his high notation sounds.
    Nur felt ashamed and said
    ‘Ops! Sorry.’ Then she left quickly.
    I laughed at her, I’m the one who need that food but Nur who get the embarrassed it. Haha ^_^
    ‘Don’t worry Nur. At least you won’t see him at FPBS.’ I said.
    After we had lunch, we decided to walk around MIPA building. We went to the forth floor by lift and it was larger than FPBS lift. As large it was, it shake harder too. We’re shaken by the lift, until it was more like a local earthquake. The foods that we already eat it seemed want to come out from our full stomach. What a villager!!. Finally we came to the fourth floor, but we still felt the shake. Then we went to the toilet and photograph our self. ^_^. Times up! We must send our body’s back to FPBS. We’re still having Listening class.
    There’s always sadness behind happiness. On 16 October 2008, I lost my cell phone and wallet in Al’Furqon. The thief must be an old player, because it was a few seconds’ lose. I told the security about my loses, but there was only one security from four who looks cared and be able to help me. The other looked uncared and some of them made jokes on me. I felt unrespectable, as a woman and as a human as well. I wonder how can they get their job as public services?. What if it’s happen to their family? Is there any joke?
    But I tried to feel calmed. My friend Nur, lend me some money so I can called someone. I called my boyfriend and told him what was happened to me. He was shocked and quickly took me to the police station.
    Now I realized that college life is a little bit different. I can except all of the things and enjoy it. Life goes on! ^_^

    • ????????
    • December 3rd, 2008

    ?????
    test.,,,test mo posting nie

  13. My Best Friend
    First day when I stepped foot in front of a room that it became my new class, I saw around of the room and some college students who looked busy with their activities. I thought that the class was my new class and they would be my classmates.
    I sat and talked with one of female students on my left side. Her name is Irma. She came from Bandung. We chatted about how we could get in Education University of Indonesia especially English Department. Apart of her, I introduced my self to Selvi. She sat next to Irma. She came from Tasikmalaya. She lived in Bandung with her cousin. And then, I walked slowly around the class and acquainted with other students. They came from different cities. A few minutes later, a female student entered the class late and she sat in a chair behind me. When I saw toward her, I already knew her. Actually, she was Tia, my friend in English course when we were in senior high school. So, we chatted and told story each other.
    Our friendship was getting closer. It began when we were in same group for speaking subject. Apart of that, we had same hobby, it was dress up. Before enter to the class for joining the meeting, we used time for dressing up in bathroom. It was very pleasure become their close friend. They could manage the time for studying and taking a walk. They gave a lot of good advices for me who has younger age than them. If I had a problem, I could share it to them.
    I got more friends when I met other college students from class C1 in Windy’s rent house. Actually, I already know some of them like, Ami and Kean. They were my friends in senior high school. However, Windy introduced me to her other friends. Minda, Dhanni, Bayu, Ajeng, Desti, Fajar, Dhea were my new friends. They were very nice to me. One thing I like from their characteristic was they liked joking. We humiliated each other but no one between us felt offended.
    One day, Kean invited me to join and come to Saung Sadu in Soreang. He asked me for fishing together with other students from his class. We fished, have a lunch and taken some pictures there. I felt very comfortable around them. They were more attractive than my close friends in class B1. That made me happier stayed with them than with my friends in B1 because I was a talkative person too.
    Apart of that if they were assembling in Windy’s rent house, one of them sent message to me and invited me. And then if they were organizing some events, they asked me to join.
    Confusion happened when Kean asked me to move on to his class. Apart of Kean, the other students from class C1 invited me to move. So, their class would more crowd. Actually, I wanted to move on because I already became a sister between them. I was very glad staying around them. They were very cohesive.
    I told my planning to one of my close friends, Irma. She was little surprise but she heard my story until finish. After she heard my story, she didn’t agree with my planning because if I moved to class C1, class B1 would more silent. Because of the encouragement from my friends in class C1, I intended to move class. Irma gave me advice that to move on other class was very difficult and busy.
    Actually, I didn’t bring my self to leave class B1 and my best friends; Irma, Tia and Selvi. If I could move them I wanted they move on with me too but it was not impossible. Class C1 only could add one or two new students.
    To make me easier, Kean, Ajeng, and Ami would try for helping me to move class. I could move on in second semester. I knew to arrange this one is very busy but the students of C1 would help me. If I couldn’t move on to class C1, I would stay in B1 but my friends in C1 would still become my best friends.
    After the final exam finished, my friends in class B1 went to their hometowns, but I was still in Bandung to manage my removal from class B1 to C1. Fortunately, I was accompanied by Kean and Ajeng from class C1 to manage my problem. Kean accompanied me to BAAK in campus to ask the requirements of my removal. One of the committee in BAAK told some requirements to me. I had to fill a personality data and a form that contained my reason to move on another class. Apart of that, one of my parents had to give the signature on the form. After that, I had to meet the leader of English Department, Mr. Wahyu in his office and gave the form to him.
    First day, I was accompanied with Ajeng to BAAK. I filled the form, wrote my reason to move on, and asked my mother to give her signature. After I could fill the requirement in first day, I called Mr. Wahyu. Unfortunately, Mr. Wahyu didn’t come that day. He returned to his hometown for some days. He asked me to come to his office three days later.
    Three days later, Ajeng, Kean, and I came to the campus anymore and visited Mr. Wahyu’s office. I couldn’t find Mr. Wahyu there. And then, Kean called Mr. Wahyu anymore. Apparently, Mr. Wahyu would come to campus on 11 o’clock. I was very fed up and so sorry to Kean and Ajeng.
    During we waited for Mr. Wahyu, we went to Gerlong and looked for some foods. After we got a lunch, we returned to Mr. Wahyu’s office and apparently Mr. Wahyu was there. And then, I described the reason that made me wanted to visit him. Before he gave his signature on my form, he asked my reason to move on another class. 30 minutes passed, finally Mr. Wahyu gave his signature on my form. After I gave the permission of Mr. Wahyu to move on another class, we returned to BAAK and submitted the form. The committee in BAAK would manage the new KRS for me for five days.

    to be continue
    .

    • nabila_bella
    • December 6th, 2008

    Second draft
    MY CLASS, MY CONFUSION

    My name is Nabilah Fairuz Al-Bantany. You can call me Bella because my friends and my families called me so. I am eighteen years old. I am in college. I am accepted as a new student on Education University of Indonesia (UPI) in English Department by PM DK.
    I am happy and proud to be in this college. I am happy because I was one of the happiest and luckiest students from thousand students who have been accepted on UPI because UPI is one of PTN (Public University) in Indonesia. Beside that, UPI is one of the best and biggest universities in Indonesia. Even more, UPI is the chosen University in the world. UPI is one of the best 5 thousand Universities in the world. I must be proud of it. There were too many students who have registered but they were not accepted on UPI because of several reasons such as failed on the entered-test and lacked of money, etc.
    I felt so worry and nervous. I am in English Department of UPI. It’s the best and the most competitive department on UPI even in Indonesia. All of the students in this department are the best and outstanding students. I saw new possibilities, opportunities and challenges. It made me changed my way of life. I must be better than before. I must do my best. I mustn’t be left behind by others.
    On the first day, I met my classmates. We are in B1 class, the language and literature programs. But, we did neither talk a lot nor have a good conversation among us. I didn’t know who they are and where they come from. I did neither recognize nor know their names. What was their typical? Were they easygoing, selfish or too clever? I didn’t know it at first.
    I wrote my lesson schedule. I looked at the lesson. There are reading, speaking, listening and writing lesson. There is also a general lesson. They are religion and Bahasa Indonesia lesson. I also looked at the names of the lecturers. There are Mrs. Nia Nafisah, Mr. Ruswan Dalyono, and etc. But, I didn’t recognize all of them. How if I would be thought by unkind lecturer? How if the way of lecturer gives a lesson is not suitable or too tight for me? What about getting “C” on my report? I hope it wouldn’t happen. But, nobody knew about it.

    @@@

    Several weeks after the class started have passed. Now, I knew not only all of the names of my classmates but also the names of my lecturers. But I found difficulties in understanding their characteristic.
    My day was getting worse when I realized something. I was not good in reading lesson. I was so lazy to read book, newspaper or magazine in Bahasa Indonesia even in English. My lecturer who taught reading lesson was Mrs. Nicke Yunita Moecharam. She was a hard worker and discipline lecturer.
    One day, when we were in class. She asked us to make a group of five students. I belonged to a group with Herlin, Meike, etc. She ordered us to do exercise on the book. I had already done it.
    “Why do we have to be in a group?” I asked.
    “You must discuss your answer with your group.” said her.
    After the class ended…
    “Nabilah, do you have any problems in a group?” asked her.
    “No, I just confuse why we have to be in a group.” I said.
    “If you have any problem with my class, just tell me!” she said.
    I didn’t answer anything. I was like stung by thousands bees.
    My friends looked at me. It was so bad. I was blaming myself.
    The next several days, I had no power in learning reading lesson. I was powerless in every reading lesson meeting, I couldn’t concentrate well. I didn’t get Mrs. Nicke’s point. It was so difficult for me. My score in reading was so bad. It was getting worse and worse.
    If I got reading assignments, I couldn’t do it very good. I have no self confidence in overcoming my phobia in reading lesson.
    The worst was when reading mid term test. The test which was given was a poem. I have never read poem before. I was in a very big and serious trouble. I got stuck. I didn’t know what should be done with the questions on the test. I believed that I would get a bad score. My reading test was failed. Poor me!

    @@@

    Day by day has passed. I must find the way how I could be better in reading lesson. I decided to go to the British Council Indonesia in ITB. It was on the 2nd floor of ITB library. I went there and registered my name. It wasn’t too difficult. The British Council was a library where all the books there were written in English.
    I borrowed four books. The first book I borrowed was 6 tales from Shakespeare. It was an interesting one. I loved reading that book. It made me curious to read another interesting book. That was the time when I started to like reading.
    With my patient and my desire to repair my reading score, I tried to read a lot to make my brain usual to receive thousands even millions words a day. I hoped that I could reach the moon on the sky. Besides that, to decrease my boredom I watched movie. I have watched 4 movies in one day. I hoped it could establish and explore my ability in English.
    Well, my day was going brighter. I could see sunshine. Everything was going to be better. Everything was beautiful in my eyes. I loved my days. My class was going to be more conducive. Everyone in the class has their own characteristic. I could accept it. We had to accept it. I loved my class.
    Then, I had improvements in reading. Now, I had no reasons for not getting good score in reading. I went to British Council every 2 weeks and I borrowed 4 books. I love reading so much. Mrs. Nicke said that our mid-term test overall was good. She appreciated our struggle in exploring our opinion about the question on the test. Well, we had done it. I succeed. I love reading, I didn’t afraid to read book anymore.

    -THE END-

    (I threw some paragraphs from the first draft)

    NaByLA_BeLLa

  14. Back to the first time, when I graduated from technical senior high school on July; everyone prepared which way their future led. Many of my friends chose to seek a job, and the rest were continuing their studies. I preferred to continue my studies to the University because in senior high school that was not enough for me. Therefore, I chose the university that would be improve my skill in order to face the future.
    After a month, my friends and I decide to UPI in Bandung. Usually people who want to enter the college chose SPMB test, apparently our ability were not reach it, so we decided to take easier way called UM test. It seems easy because the test is only Psycho test and ability test. It took two days for UM test and I able to answer the question smoothly. The result of UM came after two week later, we always worried about our result because it is only our chance. If we took SPMB test was already late. Then the announcement of our result came, so we went to UPI Bandung. From 6 people who took UM test it was only 4 people accepted to UPI, I wasn’t had big expectation to entered UPI, but somehow I felt happy because I think anyone who passed UM UPI was great people and I belong to them. Hehehe. On UM test I chose English course not technical course why? Maybe my skill was not in technical but I had intention to English course. The first choice was in English course the second was in Japanese course and another intention was in ILKOM.

    From the three choices I passed in English course, I was so happy and thanked to the God. Maybe my skill in English was not good compare to the original people from senior high school, but I cannot lose because that reason. In resign time in BAAK I met many senior people that came from English course to escort the new student. They waited in the front of BAAK, when I finished and came out suddenly someone yelling to me and asked what course which you took before and I said “English” with loudly voice, Then somebody came probably he was the escort from English senior. I followed him and ended in PKM building, he said to me “you must take your formal college uniform there”.
    I went to second floor PKM building and waited to call by the officer to take my uniform. After its finished again somebody told me to Parterre park, first I didn’t know where the Parterre was. So I asked to one of senior to guide me to Parterre. There I had to fill some data and met with the leader of ESA (English Student Association). He told me the rules of university and everything that belong to university. Last when almost maghrib he told me “you must prepared for MIMOSA (something like Orientation time).

    To be continued…

    • someone
    • December 10th, 2008

    Test…..test…. I want to post my final draft. Read it!

    • Meike Tri Yurinda (0807534)
    • December 10th, 2008

    koq ga bs d sbmit y???????
    Kang aq krim k email aj y…

    • istia h.n
    • December 11th, 2008

    My Life, My Choice
    When we were born in the world actually we have been confronted with a way which will we choice. Our parents gave us guidance and guideline about religion, way of worship and education. They were given to turn our future.
    When I was very young, my mother always said that one day I will be adult. At that time I didn’t understand what my mother said, perhaps my mother’s mean that I will be adult, get job, get married and have child. But now, when I become a student in a collage( I take English department) I just understand what my mother said. It’s mean a choice in my life. Even, at beginning I entered in a collage and had to do it, I was faced to many choice which will decide my future. At beginning i was shockingly with my new condition. It was very different from when I was in senior high school. Now, I am demanded to stand alone and have to mature in all respect. I can’t let up at all, I have to hardworking. If I only sit back, I will fall behind from another. And the most thing that made me surprised that my friends’ ability in English. They speak fluently English. While, at beginning my English was very bad. At that time I was really nothing, I only some one who could not to spoke English, some one who had to got to know the environment and the people. Until I made a promise” it doesn’t matter if today I had to get to know my environment, but one day, the environment will know who am I?”
    Before I got lesson, I had to get through orientation phase. The orientation was devided in two program. First, for university orientation. Second, for department orientation. In university orientation I just knew a few friends and a litle knowladge about my university. After university orienatation finished, all new student had to followed deparment orientation. But, for this orientation is not all student followed the orientation.
    “if you want to take part in organization of department program, you have to followed our program whice is devided in four process. First, SPG( small peer guidance). Second, Getar Cinta(islamic program). Third, LKM(Excersice of leadership basic)” said some one in his announcement.
    “Want you to join with student organization?” my friend ask to me
    “ yes of course, I love organization”
    “ Will you difficult to manage your time for learn and for organization?, you were in senior high school and you are in collage is different from.” She continued
    His statament made me doubted to joined organization, I afraided I was really could not manage my time.
    So do with my boy friend, he prohited me to join up organization
    “ focus on your study, don’t disturb your self with organization!” she said in Hand Phone(HP)
    “ But I love organization, I can’t life perfectly without organization.” I dispute
    “ Please give me chance to show that I can do it, without disturb my study?”
    “ Ok, if that’s your choice, you may to join up organization, but you only may take part in one organization, no more!” he speak resolutely
    Actually I didn’t understand with his mind. But, I love him, I will do anything which he want.

    • Yulizarkomarawan
    • December 13th, 2008

    Boredom? Oh no………….

    Last June I planned to attend a test in order to can enter the university. It was called SNMPTN. I had prepared myself to attend it. I tried to do the SNMPTN question everyday. Apparently, it was very difficult. So, I decided to solve it with my friend. I studied it with my friend for several weeks so that I could solve the question. I thought I was ready to face SNMPTN. I enrolled myself to SNMPTN committee. I attended the SNMPTN test in Cirebon.
    The SNMPTN test had come. It happened in July. When I saw the question, I was dizzy. I doubted what I could do it. I tried to do it. Apparently, I could do it. But I didn’t know what the question was true or false. After I finished attending the test, I lose confident. I prayed to god in order to accept in the university this year everyday.
    After I waited long enough, the month which decided my education fate came. In august, the result of the SNMPTN was announced in newspaper and internet. I saw it in the morning by phone. I entered my SNMPTN number. I was very afraid and worried when I waited the result of SNMPTN. If I didn’t accept in the university this year, I would lose a chance to be a student university. After I waited and waited, the announcement had come. Fortunately, I could be accepted in Indonesian university of education. I accepted in English language and literature program. Afterwards I ran to my mother and my father room. I told them that I accept in UPI.
    “Mom” cried I “I am accepted in English Language and Literature program.”
    “Thanks Heaven” said my mother “Don’t forget to say thanks to God.”
    After that I took a prayer. Then I searched some information about fee for registration. I searched it in internet but I couldn’t get it. A few days after that I found The fee.
    A several days later I went to Bandung where Indonesian university of education stayed I went there for paying registration. When I entered Indonesian University of Education which is located in Ledeng, north Bandung, I was charmed. The high buildings were looked very beautiful. It was a new building. I also saw an old building which had European style called Isola. But it was looked clean and tidy. Besides that the environmental was very clean, tidy and green. It attracted my attention. I thougt I will be enjoy, if I stayed there.
    The general lecture had been begun. I had begun lecture with general lecture for three days. It was called “mimosa”. During Mimosa I stayed with Arif in his boarding house in Cilimus. He didn’t mind, if I stayed with him for temporary. I enjoy attending general lecture. If I had problem about general lecturer, I could ask to him. He would help me because he became a general lecture committee. So, he knew all about general lecture. I felt very comfortable to attend lecture. I thought I would be enthusiasm the lecturing the classroom.
    The general lecturer had been finished. I prepared myself to attend lecturer in class. Before the lecturing was begun, I went home in Majalengka. When I arrived home, I told my experience to my parent in the afternoon. In the morning I prepared my things which took to Bandung. Afterwards I had a talk with my parent in living room. Suddenly, Arifs’s father came when I was talking with my parent. Firstly he asked to me how my lecturing was. Then he told about Arif’s boarding house.
    “Arifs’ boarding house is too small for two people” said him to my parent and me “if I knew that you would stay together, I would ask to Arif to search a Boarding house larger.”
    “Okay, I will search boarding house as soon as possible” said I
    “During you search the boarding house, you can stay in Arif’s boarding house until you get a boarding house which was comfortable with you.” Said him
    He also asked to me that Arif would bring computer. So, the boarding house was getting smaller, if I was still there. I was startled at hearing it. I thought Arif’s father had me go from Arif’s boarding house. After that I went to Bandung. I asked to Arif that I would move from his boarding house as soon as possible.
    “Rif, I will search the boarding house. Then I will move from your Boarding house as soon as possible.”
    “Why?” asked him
    “I ‘m Afraid to disturb you’re the lecturing” answered I
    Afterwards I told about his father who came to my house. He suggested me in order to move after Idul Fitri. But I decided to move as soon as possible.
    “I don’t want to disturb your again” said I “Thanks for your helping”
    A few days later I searched a boarding house. My friend suggested a boarding house. But I dislike it because it was located in near grave. Next day I found a boarding house in panorama 2. I looked it. I thought it was comfortable enough. I told to my parent that I agreed in order to stay there. So, my father came to Bandung to see the boarding house which I choose. He had paid the fee for a year.
    Two days later I moved from arif boarding house. Before I moved, I said thanks to arif because he had given me a place for having a rest during me attended general lecturing.
    “Why do you move today?” He asked to me
    “I didn’t want to make you busy again.” I answered
    He offered me in order to move after Idul Fitri. But I had decided to move that day. So, I took my things in arif boarding house.
    After I moved from Arif’s boarding house, I stay in my boarding house in panorama. There I felt something which was different. I felt very quiet. I always remembered my family at home. I always missed them. Sometime I thought that I wanted to go home and stop college. If I did it, I would my parent sad.
    I was very bored in my boarding house. So, I decided to go shopping with my friend. I was very happy and I could forget my boredom when I went shopping. I also attended some activities in campus such as breaking fast time together and tutorial to lose my boredom. But it lost my boredom for temporary. If I went to my boarding house, I would feel bored again so that I cried again. I would only take a prayer to make me relaxing.
    One day I visited and stayed in friend’s boarding house to lose my boredom. Apparently, it was success enough to lose my boredom. I was happy when I stayed there. So, I could forget my boredom. It was because I could tell about anything wit my friend until I was sleepy and sleep. I thought if I visited friend’s boarding house, my boredom would lose gradually. So, I went to friend’s boarding house after I attended the lecturing. I played there. I would go to my boarding house in the afternoon or in the evening. I always go there everyday. But one day I felt very tired after I arrived in my boarding house. It was because I should walk from Cilimus to panorama. It was far enough and used up my energy.
    One night I thought in my boarding house. If I went to my friend to friend’s boarding house, I would disturb my friend. I was also very tired. I decided to visit my friend three times or twice a week. It meant I would spend much time in my boarding house. I thought and thought again how to lose my boredom during I stayed in my boarding house. Suddenly I remembered why I was comfortable to stay in friend’s boarding house. I was comfortable to stay in friend’s boarding house because there was a person which could be persuaded to talk. “Aha” said I “I see what my problem is. I must know the other inhabitants.” So, in the next day I introduce myself to them. After that, I always play in the other inhabitants everyday after I attended the lecturing. So, I was getting closer with them. I was happy when I gather with them for sharing. It was because there was a spoof about them.
    After I was getting closer with the other inhabitant, I felt comfortable to stay in my boarding house. My spirits for studying had come again. My boredom had lost. If I stayed in friend’s boarding house, I would remember my bed which was comfortable in the boarding house. I was more comfortable to stay in boarding house. It was because one of the inhabitants took a television. So, I could television program in my boarding house. Thanks god.

    • Yulizarkomarawan
    • December 13th, 2008

    I had finished,sir!

    Thanks…………

    Minggu yang padettttttt banged…….. eung!

    • Siti Nurhasanah
    • December 23rd, 2008

    My Narrative Text doesn’t appear…!!!
    wHy….?????

  15. I HAVE POSTED MY FINAL DRAFT TWICE, BUT IT DIDNT APPEAR
    PLEASE CHECK MY FINAL DRAFT SIR .
    THANK YOU
    HHE

    • irma Rizkiani
    • January 3rd, 2009

    tez tez ..
    ko gag bisa ngirim ia??

  16. sir , have u check my final draft ????

  17. i’m sorry, i haven’t had the chance to check your works now. but rest assured, i’ll read them right away

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